The Book of Salamat: Twenty Pesos
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Twenty Pesos  

Friday, April 24, 2009

A rattling sound of a small bell welcomed their arrival to a public market. After they had stepped out of the bus, the first thing she did was scan the alley between the market and the shoulder of the highway. That high pitch bell announced of something so familiar to her, and her eyes was looking for it in which her mind already knew.

There it was, she found it, right next to the public kiosk, right before the surrounding gleeful children. She turned to check if her mother was looking at it, too, so it would be easier for her to make her buy one cone. But her mother was looking straight ahead, oblivious to the alluring chanting of the tiny bell, or at least she appeared to be. She wanted to pull her mother's hand towards the inviting ice cream cart, but her mother overwhelmed her and pulled her instead towards the unkempt, overcrowded interior of the public market.

They walked inside towards the meat section, a basket made of rattan swayed beside her as they waded through the crowd. Her mother released her other hand when they stopped near the end of a long row of tiled unbroken tables. Beef and dressed chickens scattered all over the tables, and parts of pigs hanged still from the long iron bar that ran parallel above the tables. Smell of blood and stale flesh and foul liquids hovered in the air, almost made her puke.

The fat woman with a dull blue apron wrapped around her, which she guessed was one of the vendors behind the long tables, flashed a grin when she saw them. Her mother smiled, too, and greeted each other while she just stood there observing the crowd, the place, the shouting, and the offering and bargaining that polluted the already foul air.

"Is that your youngest, Irene?" the fat woman asked her mother with a voice a little louder than the surrounding noise.

"Yes," her mother replied. "She won't stop asking until I bring her along with me."

"Look at her, she's taller than the last time I saw here. How old is she now?"

"She's eight."

The woman looked down at her and smiled exorbitantly. "Hello, sweetie. What a beautiful girl you've become, honey. You still remember me?"

She responded with a coyly smile and a shaking head. Her mother told her nothing about this woman.

The woman went back to her mother and, in the middle of buying and selling, they were both engrossed by their adult chitchat.

The fat woman handed her mother a plastic filled with chicken wings and pork meat, and followed with yet another exchange of gossip.

When she heard something she didn't understand from their conversation, she lightly pulled twice her mother's long skirt.

Her mother turned her head and looked down. "What is it?"

Casually, she asked, "What is a third party?"

Her mother glanced at the vendor, who giggled and shook her head, and then looked back at her and said, "It's nothing, honey. It's a word that only grown up people talk about."

Her mother and her friend continued talking, but this time their voices were slightly hushed. As her mother handed a hundred peso bill to the woman, she heard yet another new word from the latter. She pulled her mother's skirt again.

"What is it?"

"What's a hoar?"

"What?"

"She said, 'she's a big hoar'. What does it mean?"

Her mother's friend chuckled at her innocence. And she didn't like it. She didn't like the way she laughed. She didn't like her laughing at her. She didn't like her mother's friend. Cautious yet uncertain, she tucked herself closed to her mother's right side, and instinctively gripped her mother's hand. And she stood there staring questioningly at the flabby woman.

Her mother, who grinned along, said to her, "Honey, this is a conversation between two adults, OK? And ---wait, here ---" She fished something from her skirt's left pocket.

She heard the rattling of nickels in her mother's shallow skirt pocket, and turned her head slightly toward where she heard it. The pinched fingers of her mother flew from the pocket to the smirking space before her, and then her mother freed the three 1 peso coins, which landed splendidly to her wide opened right palm.

Her excitement leapt. Her shy face revealed her smile and, in her mind, the floating image of the grainy ice cream enticed her once again. She gave to her mother the rattan basket and, with her fist shut tightly the three coins inside, she ran as fast as she could towards the portable ice cream cart outside.



She waited in line, but when it was about her turn she remembered something. As the boy before her paid his scoop of ice cream, she was just standing there fighting over a decision.

She had made a promise to herself. And she didn't want to break it. She told herself to buy something only if she asked money from her parents. But today she was not asking for it. Her mother gave it to her, just like those many times in the past. And she shouldn't spend them; she had to place them somewhere where she had put those other coins.

The face of the vendor beamed as she looked at him. She peered over the opened aluminum lid, and saw three beckoning colors of inviting ice cream that smelled of mango and chocolate and vanilla. Her eyes glowed and her mouth watered as the cold vapor met her face. And as she was about to give the man her coins, the other barefoot kids rushed toward the ice cream cart from nowhere, their arms heaved their money in the space before the man, and vied for his attention. The man instead entertained the more eager children. She freed herself from the tempting call. She stepped back, turned around, and thrust herself out the small throng of frenzied young crowd.



Along the way back to their house, her mother asked what she had done with the money. She told her she wasn't hungry, and that she was keeping them. And as soon as they arrived home, she dashed inside, up a flight of stairs, and into her room.

She was excited and happy that her savings were increasing. Last week, her mother gave her five-peso coin, and two weeks before that she had dropped two peso coins and two twenty-five cents. Last month she had saved nine pesos and fifty cents. She lied on her bed facing the ceiling above, her mind a dream of beautiful dress and pints of ice cream. But what her young mind didn't see was that her every attempt to free her mind and speak of those words she'd been keeping inside were muffled by the worldly value of her mother's coins.

After some time she stood and grabbed her peggy bank. And through the thin slit along the center top of it, she peeked to estimate her rather accumulated price.

--- END ---


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14 Posted Comments: to “ Twenty Pesos

  • floreta
    April 25, 2009 at 11:54 AM  

    this is great. you've captured her childlike wonder and innocence well. i am not sure if i could have held off on mango ice cream though! it's always great to see other pinoy writers. :)

  • gautami tripathy
    April 25, 2009 at 11:34 PM  

    I struggled to read through it. The font colour really hurt my eyes. But it seems it was well worth the effort.

    Hope next time you are kind for our eyes sight. And yes, I use Mozilla firefox!

    watch the movie from the sidewalks

  • Tumblewords:
    April 26, 2009 at 2:29 AM  

    Well tuned tale. It was easy to feel her thoughts as well as a touch of independence.

  • Quoyle
    April 26, 2009 at 9:54 AM  

    Hello, guys! thank you so much for expressing your appreciation to the story. It really feels good, and it inspires me more.

    As to the font color, I apologize for using the wrong shade. It was concern to upon posting this entry, thinking that choosing such color was fine. But I'll be more careful now, and will change the color to something less intense.

    thank you for bringing it up. it helps me improve my blog.

    Best regards!

  • lissa
    April 26, 2009 at 11:26 PM  

    I am now wondering what she plans on doing with those coins, I guess I would prefer a more definite ending but your details of the market and how the child thinks is perfectly written

    I enjoyed this story, thanks for sharing

  • Quoyle
    April 27, 2009 at 4:14 PM  

    Lissa, thanks for following and for expressing your appreciation!

    about the ending, well, i was not intending to narrate how the girl is going to spend those coins she saved.

    the purpose of the story is to actually tell how some parents wont let their children interact with adults in conversations, and instead bribe them to shoo them away.

    children need to interact not only with people her age but also with those grown ups in which they can gain more lessons to learn.

  • Millionaire@age20
    April 27, 2009 at 9:57 PM  

    Wow! Nice story dude! thnx for the add!

  • Niti
    April 27, 2009 at 10:28 PM  

    first time here..lots to catch up on.. loved it.. :) very crisp n very well written

  • Quoyle
    April 28, 2009 at 8:13 PM  

    Millionaire@age20:
    salamat for following and for the comments!

    Niti:
    most of the stories here extend to more than one page, but I hope you still enjoy reading them.

    Guys, please tell me if the posts' font color are hurting your eyes....I'll be more glad to change them right away. Thanks!

    Hugs!

  • ARUNA
    April 28, 2009 at 11:13 PM  

    wow this is gr8........i enjoyed reading it, every emotion is captured so well.
    I liked ur page layout a lot....colorful n attractive!

  • Wendy
    April 29, 2009 at 5:05 AM  

    There's such a sense of stifling vs. not being able to be contained in this story: there is the crowd of the market atmosphere. There is the smell that threatens to overwhelm. And there is adult language that reaches non0adult ears...and I love the sense that this little girls who is shooed away is way more knowledgeable than adults will ever give her credit. You leave with a sense that she's going to do big things with her money...things adults wouldn't even think of.--Wendy

  • Quoyle
    April 29, 2009 at 7:52 PM  

    Thanks for appreciating the post and the layout, Aruna! I hope the owner of the template will not be mad at my adding a background wood image and for making the columns transparent. :(

    I hope I can finish on time the new one I'm currently writing. I like to touch the innocence of children again and make the story revolve around their world. There is so much story and emotions and messages in the eyes and in the innocent life of a child, things that we can never feel or see from anyone else.

    this is why the next story's characters are children. It is my hope that I can help them convey their insights of the world.

    To Wendy, I completely agree with you on what you said. And to add, sometimes messages are best implied on contrasting issues.

    Thanks to you all for posting your comments!

    Hugs!

  • ellie
    April 30, 2009 at 4:01 AM  

    I really liked the descriptions of the place and their lives..it gave it a lot of depth and strength.

  • Elizabeth Bradley
    May 1, 2009 at 4:00 AM  

    Thanks for the follow. I liked how the story ended.

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